Wikipedia:Artikel pilihan/Usulan/Ditolak/Oktober 2021

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Pengusulan ditutup karena artikelnya masih belum siap dicalonkan. Danu Widjajanto (bicara) 10 Oktober 2021 08.18 (UTC)

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Survivalcraft

Pengusul: Jeromi Mikhael (b • k • l)

Status: Tidak akan dilanjutkan

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Overall, the article needs an in-depth copyedit before it goes up- there are lots of tense issues and awkward phrasing, as well as an often almost-informal tone.
Also, paragraphs should have a bit of weight to them- 1 or 2-sentence paragraphs are generally discouraged.
You should go through the gameplay section with an eye towards "if someone who never played this game or Minecraft read this, would they understand by the end how the game works"- right now I think it's a little hard to follow; for example it never actually says if it's voxel/block-based like Minecraft or if you just get blocks for mining a deformable world.
The Survivalcraft 2 section should be after Reception, as it's not part of the development of the original game.
The article seems to have a general slant of "is better than Minecraft" or at least has a lot of things Minecraft doesn't, but Minecraft has changed a lot since 2011- it would be more accurate to say that some people thought it was better/different than Minecraft at the time. Your reviews bear this out- the later they are, the less impressed they were.
Speaking of reviews, typically the reception section is organized by theme, grouping what critics thought about different aspects of the game- you instead have one paragraph per review.
Overall, one of the biggest issues (which I'm sure you're aware of) is that there's just not that much there- a good chunk of the article is a changelog of releases, there's only 4 reviews, etc. I'm not sure there's much you can do about that, but if there's any sources you can dig up to add, that would help.

Jeromi Mikhael (bicara) 9 Oktober 2021 05.15 (UTC)[balas]

@Jeromi Mikhael kalau masih draft jangan diusulkan dulu, harap hanya mengusulkan AP kalau memang sudah siap untuk dicalonkan. Danu Widjajanto (bicara) 10 Oktober 2021 08.18 (UTC)[balas]

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